Short Story : Gary’s life

180410130064 / Class C

Summary : Gary’s lame life becomes more wonderful

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​Gary’s life

Gary stands still at his terrace. Looking something outside his house which interesting. Turn his head as postman pass by. He looked again but there’s nothing. Gary holding a glass as he drinks a nice lemon juice from the fridge. Later Gary goes into kitchen, take something in the fridge. It has a round shape. Red color

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and nice to eat. Gary cut it slice, combine with a slice of orange, put it to serving dish, and wash his hand as he goes into the living room.

Gary walk slowly, take a seat in comfy couch, and put this red and orange into his mouth. He enjoy so much eating this fruit. After that, Gary feels something inside him. An unhappy feeling. But Gary just ignored that. Later He just lying on his sofa, trying to forget about it. He’s looking a photo. A photo of a small man with nice smile and happiness inside him. He thinks that the photo relates to him but his just smile with other meaning. He just sit and silent for a moment. Take red and orange fruit to his mouth again very, very slowly as the sound of material breaks in his mouth. Gary still does not speak anything. He just sit as his foot make a loud noise tapping the floor. I wonder why he do that…..

Gary stands for a moment and sit down again in his comfy couch. He found a fine rectangular black edges and full of buttons. Gary just push the button, the TV went on. Shows all schedule that on air that day. It makes confusing him as he looks all schedule on giant big TV. Gary press up and down buttons all along. He’s searching all the channel and found a channel that he really likes most. It’s in channel fifty two. He pressed the channel and what he’s found is a car race. Actually Indianapolis Car Race.

He’s looking very intensive to the race. Feeling amaze by a roaring eight valve engine and a nasty sound from the combustion as come out from exhaust. He is feeling more excited when commentary gives a comment about the race.

A couple hours rolled by. Gary feels tired and wants to go to terrace for wonderful evening. As he press the red rounded button. Something came up from the TV. The TV says error for a couple of times. It makes Gary very angry. He pressed the turn off button hardly and look what happen on the TV. The TV came up with the picture that says ‘click enter’. It becomes more confusing for Gary. Without further ado and does not want to know what happens to the TV. Gary just press with very red face. Suddenly something happen and Gary was dragged by the TV monitor. After a moment. Gary wakes up with blank mind, he does not know where he is. He looked around and from far away. A nice young lady with hat on her head catch Gary’s hand and said something very fast ‘come on, let’s go, hurry. The race will began shortly. You have to prepare right now’.

Gary still confuse about what happen to him. He’s now wearing a race suit. He walked into the cars dragging by the young lady. Get on to the cars and ready for a race. Commentary talks very dramatic on microphone and said ‘start your engine’ and the race begins.

Still Gary does not push the pedals when the race begin. He still feeling confused. In the microphone. An angry man talking to Gary aggressively. ‘Hey, I want you to push the pedals, finish this race and won the game. You know what. You better go right now or you’re just go home’. Every little statement that the director said ringing in Gary’s ear. After a silent moment thinking about that. Gary pushes the pedal hardly and catch every opponent. He pushes to the max. Passing all the opponent one by one. But when he at the second position. An opponent with number sixty three bump his body to the rear body of Gary’s car. Gary can’t control and the cars hit the wall and crash. Gary fainted. He does know where he is. When he open his eyes. He look a white world and there is a black strip line when he sees the world. He still does not know where he is. When he look again the line. There are two line. One goes to the race and the second one goes to reality. He knew that he does not want to be his lame world again. Finally he choose the second line and walk into it. Gary’ awake at the hospital. It turns out. He was unconscious for two months. Gary finally recover from his injuries and the race moment continued and there’s a smile in his face.

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Thanks to:

-Allah SWT

-Adobe Audition for make me easy to edit sound.

References:

1. Need For Speed (Movie)

2. Turbo (Movie)

Word Count: 817 words

Link: https://soundcloud.com/m-salman-r/garys-life

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3 thoughts on “Short Story : Gary’s life

  1. Hello, I found some confusions while reading the story. I think the story is too short and it will be better if you put some details on it. Besides, I think that the introduction is too long before the problem appears. When the problem appears, you do not serve it specifically. Then, why do you use car race? How can it change Gary’s lame life? Then, what is the meaning of ‘the race moment continued’? Doesn’t Gary choose the reality?
    I also think that the conclusion is too short, you better write Gary’s confusion in choosing the paths longer, so the reader will be more curious about the ending.

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  2. 180410130009/ C

    Hello, I found some confusions while reading the story. I think the story is too short and it will be better if you put some details on it. Besides, I think that the introduction is too long before the problem appears. When the problem appears, you do not serve it specifically. Then, why do you use car race? How can it change Gary’s lame life? Then, what is the meaning of ‘the race moment continued’? Doesn’t Gary choose the reality?
    I also think that the conclusion is too short, you better write Gary’s confusion in choosing the paths longer, so the reader will be more curious about the ending.

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  3. This story really reminds me of Turbo movie that features a snail, whose dream to become the fastest snail. And the character’s name is similar to Spongebob’s pet snail. I love it.

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